Does this have a good start and any potential? Please critique:)?

So I've been writing this story and it is 3 chapters (not to long) and I posted it on inkpop.com and I was looking for opinions and for a critique. Just hit the button read it. a href="http://www.inkpop.com/Short%20Writing/All%20Short%20Writing/Displaced" rel="nofollow"http://www.inkpop.com/Short%20Writing/Al…/a thankyou. oh and be honest in your opinion:)